My 16 year old sister wants to become a writer.

Well the pion is there, but it lacks substance or sense. She needs to make good use of a thesaurus for starters, as some of those words do not fit. Secondly, she seems to be grasping much too hard? I understand that the quotes are meant to be deep, and emotional, but they lack understanding. Definitely a possibility, but she would need to work harder.